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Teen Poetry #6

A Song In The Wind

Cathie Arnold
Junior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 18
SC

0 posted 2002-12-04 11:29 AM

The wind's melodious song fell softly upon my ears
and I walked heeding its every sonance.

I have never heard such a majestic sound,
a majestic sound indeed.

An lavish ambrosial fragrance of wildflowers
circled about in the wind.

I let myself fall into the fluorescent green hillside
gazing into the evening beyond
while the moon shone on the mystical-blue brine.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

1 posted 2002-12-04 11:41 AM

Wow! Now I see just what images can be used to accomplish! This is a wonderful peice! I loved the Imagery! Great Write!

Rich

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2002-12-04 02:08 PM

the imagery in this piece is indeed excellent, and i like the way you followed the decription of the sound with a description of the fragrance. this is good writing.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2002-12-04 05:40 PM

All six senses in that one. Very good piece!
Laugh often, love much, live well.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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