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Teen Poetry #6

Kind of Ironic

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

0 posted 2002-12-02 07:44 PM

Yes, this is a depressing one...but very short, so no worries!

My room lit,
my music playing,
Yet nothing alive.
My mind racing,
all thoughts sleeping,
Tears running,
as I think of you.

What ya think?
Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2002-12-02 08:32 PM

Been there done that, very nice poem. Short but sweet.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are, too late to change?" -Dishwalla-

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-12-04 04:46 PM

NSnaomian~
I think I like it.
Very short and too the point,
yet the emotions are well expressed.
I felt this one.
Nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-04-2002 04:47 PM).]

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