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rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2002-12-01 05:10 AM

All you better shut up
And leave me alone
Before you throw me off
So far that I’ll go it alone

I’m not in it for the kicks
I just hate being hurt
And it’s understandable
Cause your throwing my life about
Like it’s your own
For a game

Just shut it
I’m not scared of you
Because you’re nothing
Nothing compared with what I can be

Cause there’s a beast inside
Just waiting to break through
Out of the wounds you create
Every time those words are released
Released upon my unsuspecting soul

Rage you create will hit you back
Right in your face
And you’ll wish you’d held it back
Because I’ve got power
Power in my anger
Fate beyond your vice

And I don’t see why I should deal with you
For all you are is rude and a disgrace
To your race
The human form was not meant for you
You’re hated but not by me
I don’t hate
And I wish you wouldn’t make me.

Rosie Mitchell

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

1 posted 2002-12-01 05:07 PM

Interesting... It made sense, but I don't really understand what it was about. Were you agitated or mad at someone? It sounds like you were trying really hard to write it, poetry is free, and shouldn't have to be forced. Next time try writing more from the inside. Well thanks for the read and best of luck!

-Erica-

rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

2 posted 2002-12-01 05:19 PM

Well when I wrote it I'd just had an awful day and I was feeling incredibly enraged and very upset and I just wanted o have a go at all the people who had hurt me & make them see how awful they had made me feel
I dunno how it can seem forced, I dunno maybe it seems that way but I can assure you it isn't, I never even know what I'm, writing when I do it. It just flows.
Thanks 4 takin ur time out 2 reply

Rosie Mitchell

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2002-12-02 11:57 PM

I like the poem very well, It always helps me when Im upset or sad to write, even if no one but me will read it. It helps to get the feelings calmed down. I like alot of your work, keep it up!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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