The Art of Avoiding Shiny Things

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Teen Poetry #6

The Art of Avoiding Shiny Things

StellarChica
Member

since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

0 posted 2002-11-26 08:11 PM

Have you looked at your reflection in the water lately?
Did you notice the pathetic look on your face?
I bet if and when you do,
You'll splash the water in violent frustration,
So you don't have to bear witness to your own destruction.
I've been there myself,
And everytime it's the same thing,
I realize just how pitiful I really am,
And wonder if I'd be any different,
Even if you were here,
Most of the time I wind up thinking:
I'd probably be a lot worse.

"Into this sea of waking dreams, I follow without pride. Nothing stands between us here and I won't be denied."-Sarah McLachlan

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2002-11-28 05:38 AM

quote:
And wonder if I'd be any different,
Even if you were here,
Most of the time I wind up thinking:
I'd probably be a lot worse.

Some people go far too long not knowing that they're better off without someone. You wrote this well.

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2002-11-29 05:35 PM

StellarChica~
You've done a great job of expressing the
emotion and frustration in this piece.
I also love the title...definately caught my attention.
Very nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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