Teen Poetry #6 |
Its the corners that matter |
Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Rebirth is vivid. Crystal understanding embraced in respect for this great maze. I don’t need to see the exit anymore. I don’t need to know the way. With each dead end, I turn around faster. There is more to see, and the clock winds down slowly All this time spent figuring out It’s the corners that really matter. But you knew that Walt. |
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snoduck Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 99Selah, WA |
hmm.. I don't know if this was supposed to be serious... or funny. I liked the last line "but you knew that walt" that gives it kind of a humorous twist. very nicely written. -Erica- |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Walt Whitman. Completely Serious |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kevin~ This is an excellent piece. I just love the whole concept of this and you've done a great job of putting it into verse. Well done! ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Ahh Kev! I've missed you, too! I liked this until the end and I realized I had no idea what you were talking about lol. But I like the idea of knowing what it means haha if that makes sense. anyways, stay in touch! xoxox-Kiley **You can't always trust the people you want to** [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (11-26-2002 03:36 PM).] |
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lildevil Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 47missouri,usa |
i honestly dont know what to think of it i guess it is because i have no idea who your talking about |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
** at critique message. ** Anywho, good job. I was blow away by this actually. Maybe its because I'm tired. Me don't know. Ok now, I am ramblin...good job once again.... Riley ~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Hmmm.... I'm not sure to whether this is meant to be deep or ramble, perhaps because I'm totally tired and worn out tonight. You did well on this, although I wish I grasped it better. Jenn "I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Its not really supposed to be deep at all, Rebirth is vivid. When you see the world in a different light, everything seems to come into focus. I stopped worrying about what I'm supposed to be doing with my life and how I am supposed to get there, and just started plain old living it. The reference to Walt Whitman is about his love for life. The corners refer to changes in direction, never knowing whats around them, what makes the next day worth looking forward to |
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