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LesterVisaya
Junior Member

since 2002-11-16

Posts 21

0 posted 2002-11-18 10:23 AM

I’m held down by sorrow’s gravity
standing high on grounds of arguing mirrors
What else is there to be said?
This is my own race I run with.
Hope’s glimpse is not trapped in these crazy games
but overshadowed by falsie destinations.
I would like to call out
and shout at nature with the anger trapped in this soul.
I’m comforted by sanity’s garbage
I’m not lost within these walls of despair
but trapped by crying fools escaping echoing sounds of the day
And chained down by mirrors of myself
All roads lead to a laughing Satin
Where have all my innocence gone?
I’ve become my own drunken God
eating fruits among all gardens of fools
weeping in silence with the slave I’ve become to joys of the weak.
I look under my ego’s secrets
And I found myself battling calm wars of temptation
wishing to bury death
through cultivating my once honored birth
through the rusted small pipes of unspoken anger

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-11-18 02:09 PM

Holy crap this was good!!

It was so cool how you compared Satin and God. I love your style and the words you've chosen.

Great poem

DArKNeSS

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

2 posted 2002-11-18 04:40 PM

Mmmmm satin! *cuddles her sheets* Couldn't help myself..

Save the spelling mistakes, this was a pretty good poem. I really liked this: "I’m comforted by sanity’s garbage" and the more I think about it, I like it even more...Keep writing.

~Carly

"My own eyes are not enough for me; I will see through a thousand and yet remain myself..."
~C.S. Lewis

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2002-11-21 12:56 PM

LesterVisaya~
Wow...I REALLY love this write.
This is very well written and you have included
some wonderful imagery.
VERY well penned.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

4 posted 2002-11-21 08:02 AM

Oooooo, very very very good imaginary. I had to think while I read this ( talk about a surprise, me thinking

)

Really liked this one.

Riley

~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~

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