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DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

0 posted 2002-11-17 10:55 PM

-=The Rain=-

I can feel it now
The air you breathe
Surrounds me like a dream
Lost inside a world
The fog's getting thicker
As I close my eyes

And everything hurts
On this cold, dreary day
As I ask myself
When will the rain
Stop coming down

Make-up's smeared
Running down my face
Like streams of lies
Telling a story of a girl
Who's dying inside
With no one left to help her

And everything hurts
On this cold, dreary day
As I ask myself
When will the rain
Stop coming down
...because I'm afraid of heights

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

[This message has been edited by DancinQueen (11-17-2002 10:58 PM).]

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

1 posted 2002-11-17 11:24 PM

nice to see you back.

i very much enjoyed this one.

keep em coming dq.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

2 posted 2002-11-17 11:26 PM

oh, and nice photo by the way.

first time i've seen what you look like.

and before i go, i must tell you that i love these lines

quote:

Telling a story of a girl
Who's dying inside

strikes a chord with me.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

3 posted 2002-11-18 10:50 PM

Very nice poem.

I really, really liked it. I have an affinity for rain. I don't like to be in it, but I love to write it, read about it... Sometimes I like to be in it. Only sometimes.

Anyway, the poem was beautiful, with or without the rain.

Kielo

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

4 posted 2002-11-20 04:14 PM

thanks everyone

and i'll marry the person who can tell me what it is REALLY about

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2002-11-21 11:45 AM

beautiful poem sweets
nice to see you posting again
what's it about

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2002-11-21 09:43 PM

i havent read a poem from you in a while, a lot of old people are coming back. i liked your piece, nice pic. keep on writing

regina

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-11-25 02:04 AM

DancinQueen~
I really enjoyed reading this one.
It's nice to see you posting again.
I'll be looking for more from you.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

8 posted 2002-11-25 03:28 AM

Well I haven't posted in awhile and I guess you haven't either but like always this is an awsome poem. But anyway Keep up the awsome work and hopefully you'll keep posting.
Lauren

lildevil
Junior Member

since 2002-11-21

Posts 47
missouri,usa

9 posted 2002-11-25 07:51 AM

good poem i really liked it cant wait to read more of your poems

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

10 posted 2002-11-28 11:04 PM

good job

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

11 posted 2002-11-29 08:27 PM

HEY THERE,
i loved ur poem.i'm inlove with rain too and the moon.the rain just seems to have an unexplainanble effect on me.i love the way ur poem is written.and i loved these lines..
"Like streams of lies
Telling a story of a girl"

keep posting!

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

12 posted 2002-11-29 11:22 PM

I like The Rain, the poem and the real stuff. It makes me happy and tired at the same time. I'm mildly retarded.

-Stinky Twinkie-

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

13 posted 2002-11-30 11:18 AM

wow, i havent replied to anything in months, but i certainly loved your poetry when i was here more so i thought id give you a reply. i liked thre imagery in this and i liked the ending that kinda turned the poem upside down and left me guessing at the meaning. i dont think ill guess aloud though, on the of chance i get it right i dont think youd want to marry me

hopefully youll be on again more, i like your work

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

14 posted 2002-12-08 11:29 PM

thanks everyone*

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

15 posted 2002-12-09 08:11 PM

I won't be rude.

Enjoyed. Rough meter at times, but overall, emotional and endearing.

I love the rain too.

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
-Socrates

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