Teen Poetry #6 |
my tainted thoughts |
theSunflower Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 11 |
I am completely lost in you. Thinking about you has become a part of me, a sort of character flaw. You have become one of my personality traits. To think of a life without out you, is to think of living without an arm or a leg, a disability that I would never fully recover from. Just being without you now I feel hollow, even though I know that I am not alone, the emptiness consumes me more and more every second I am not able to breath you in. This hole inside of me clouds my thoughts. It is a veil over my ability to concentrate for any amount of time, on any subject that is not you. I can’t do anything, so I spend countless hours poking incessantly at these little black letters, filling numerous files with random thoughts, in a pathetic attempt to cure myself of the pain caused by loving you. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
hah like the way wrote the last few lines, about writing and filing everything. other than a small spelling error/typo, this was written pretty well. i especially liked this line: quote: just a tip, if you want more people to read your work, read and reply to their work as well. most take notice of that. “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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