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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. 
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They stare at her Their mouths almost visibly watering Tongues practically hanging out Fantasies roaming their minds She giggles, flashes a smile, Pushes her hair back Continues gingerly putting on more lipstick They aren’t looking at her smile though They’re gaze plunges somewhere else Only rarely glancing up at her face She knows what they’re thinking She knows where they’re looking She encourages it She is dressed to please One built up the nerve to talk to her With one hand on the locker She’s all his He tells her a joke She giggles again Knowing how good she looks She hopes he’ll ask her out The other guys stare in envy All their attention is on her beauty Hoping they stand a chance against him She gazes into his gorgeous eyes Moving her body in close Her chest almost touching him She touches his arm He finally asks the big question He wants this beauty on his arm He’ll be the envy of the school She smiles, blushes And of course says yes Leaning in close, She kisses him on the cheek Letting her touch be soft on his skin Some walk away sad and disappointed They walk away together But did anyone ever notice the girl crying in the corner? |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
ouch, the ending just hit me hard that is the strongest line in the whole poem it carries the most meaning beautifully done, i hope to see more thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Wow, all I was thinking about popular girls that i am not( I think ) and the ending surprised me. Thanks for the read. Ri ~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~ [This message has been edited by Riley (11-15-2002 11:19 PM).] |
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boy and his spirit Junior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 41within my heart |
I did like this. Cause it deals with sluts, and sluts are cool. but actually. it was a really good poem. But I just thought of all those stereotypes of pretty,popular girls like the one you talked about, and its this big idea of how highschool are, but at my highschool there is no girl like that. Is there actual girls like that in high school? |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
first of all boy and his spirit can i ask where ur from??? Cause I think there is a girl like this in every school unless ur from a little town. And I dont think sluts are cool cause they give all females bed reputations. But it figures u have to be a male to think that. lil cherry~This was a great poem. I could just picture this. I havent really been replying to poems but im glad im taking the time tonight cause this was worth reading. And im looking forward to see more work by you. ~if you want something very badly set it free, if it comes back to you its yours forever, if it doesnt it was never yours to begin with~ [This message has been edited by Erin (11-17-2002 04:17 AM).] |
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Peach Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33 |
I love this poem. It is so true it makes me sad. It makes me want to start looking for 'the girl crying in the corner.' Great job...Keep writing more. If don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I understand how it feels, not because it happens to me, but because I see it happen a lot... "Sticks and stones will break my bones, |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
Wow thats totally highschool. Sucks eh? Your way of describing was amazing. I would like to hear something about that girl though. Crying...I dunno i think it would be cool to go into depth about each of the characters " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Surreal Junior Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 35Paris |
This was really strong, I thought the ending was such a great form of closure. Simple but with a twist at the end.... very nice. Glory is a silent thing-- Mineral |
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boy and his spirit Junior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 41within my heart |
Erin: I live in a fairly large city and my school has 400 students, and there is no girl like that at all. And it figures you being a female and all to think that about sluts, too. |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. |
I live in a small town and my school has 1400 students cuz they're from all over the area. I don't know if there was one girl in my mind when i wrote this or just the "popular" girls in general. It seems like unless you're popular or super gorgeous in the stereotypical kinda way then you're just not going to get the attention that you might deserve by being a good person. Just seems to me like way too much focus in the media and even in school events is on the "pretty people" and the outcasts and the people with true inner strength just get brushed aside. I changed schools this year and it's taking me a long time to ajust to the idea of people considering me "cool" but i never let myself forget what it was like to be the outcast. |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. |
the main point of this poem was for people to picture themself as one of the characters and then also be able to see another side. [This message has been edited by lil cherry (11-18-2002 08:37 PM).] |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Twisted. I like it. I love it when people twist the ending like that. Amazing write.. once again. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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