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Teen Poetry #6

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roxywrestlegirl04
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since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

0 posted 2002-11-12 08:31 PM

goodbye the sunset whispered as the stars awoke from their sleep

smaller and smaller my heart got
it was shivering from the heat

reality hit and hit hard
i knew it was defeat

the ribbons were cut
the rythym was gone
with the easy life i knew i wouldnt last long

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2002-11-13 09:51 AM

i loved it
it's simplicity made it such and extraordinary poem
i'm up to look for your other poems
thanks for the wonderful read

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-11-15 12:53 PM

This is pretty good... it actually inspired me a little to write something, which I'm going to do once I'm done replying in here... heh.

Thanks for the brain kick.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-11-15 02:01 PM

Yea...the simplicity i think is what makes it so impactful...great work

Thanks for the read!

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

Riley

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since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

4 posted 2002-11-16 02:34 PM

sooooo short, yet so impactful ( as i believe it twas used above ) thanks much for the read * to brian * go write hurryyyyyy!!!!

Ri

~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~

boy and his spirit
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since 2002-08-26

Posts 41
within my heart

5 posted 2002-11-17 12:13 PM

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~SEA/ Moderator

[This message has been edited by SEA (11-17-2002 12:48 PM).]

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