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wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

0 posted 2002-11-11 11:40 PM

The waves are crashing in my face
I want to run away from the drops that cling to me
The rocks are constantly beaten from the waves
The clashing between liquid and solid are deafening

I see people jump in
Take that step out of monotony of everyday living
I want to be like that
I want to feel the coolness on my skin

I am to scaried to
I run instead afraid to try something new
Why can't I?
Why am I stuck in this unending cycle

I want to fall
Feel the burn of that first hit
Then be surrended by nothingness
Blue,crisp feeling liquid

Everyday I try to take that step
I see more and more friends do it
But, atlast I am stuck, on the beach
My towel in hand, my security

I can't get hurt this way
I have my sand to cling to
My own life, just in the balance
Searching but always running away

To feel the lightness
To only imagine what i would do
If only i would take it
and run off the cliff into the ocean

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-11-12 01:40 PM

Hey good poem. I liked it a lot. At first I thought you were just afraid to swim but at the end I understood more. Good imagery by the way.

Muy Bueno
Darkness

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-11-13 04:09 PM

I love the ending, how smoothly you worked your poem into it. This is a very interesting topic for a poem and you honoured it well. I commend you.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2002-11-14 04:55 PM

wvplayernotreally~
This is a very well written piece.
There is so much depth of meaning beyond the obvious.
I really enjoyed reading this.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2002-11-14 10:59 PM

everything has its time and place...one day you'll take that step too...when it's right for you

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

5 posted 2002-11-15 12:05 PM

wow.

haven't seen you around for a while sugarhigh.

welcome back. heh.

good write. thanks for sharing.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now.

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