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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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what happened why did she die? we all know but no one really does why is the sky blue? i hate the bills have piled up the thing growing in her dead. never trusted any of you he hit her in the most literal sense of the word desperate. all she needed gone. so funny she's dead. you didn't even realize died on december 4th just the day of her birthday no one. saved. go away please. pitiful, pathetic it's hilarious. hysterical young person your touch its revolting when can she wake up? she had a lyrical weapon watch her. glad. she's not dead. idiot. just passed out. aren't you glad she's still alive. angry. writing. sad. imminent. danger. to her person ah, well she's ok only needed to vent I guess. |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
Cool. I liked this one especialy when you twisted it around and said that she was just passed out. Good Poem thanks for sharing. Darkness |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
wonderful  the twist did get me there I wasn't expecting it at all Is this about someone I know Ina? hey, when are we gonna talk again you're never on anymore  talk to you later là où est mon amour? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Nobody ever talks to Acire anymore. Poor guy.  Ina... this is superbly written, you know. So many things in this poem caught me completely off guard, it's like it came at me from all directions. It's admirable how you can so easily embrace chaos and scribe it in poetry that is so beautiful. Keep up the excellent work, hon. Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Ina~ Wow...I really like the twists and turns that you included in this piece. This messed with my mind and I always like things that do that.  VERY nicely penned. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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