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The Sunset
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The Sunset |
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Alone Afraid n' Away Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 19 |
As the the moon bagan to rise over the ocean clear and blue You slowly glanced into my eyes Which what was next I hoped I knew I turned to you, you turned to me Just starring into eachother's eyes When it happened I felt free And you suddenly swept away all my cries A kiss you gave me, no more no less As the wind blew swiftly through my hair When it happened I forgot all the rest And just knowing you were there That single night I'll never forget the sunset and the stars On a beach was where we met While creating a night that was ours |
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Alone Afraid n' Away Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 19 |
ok people who do reply PLEASE GO EASY dont make me cry! j/p  thank you soooo much!!  |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Alot of emotions in this that u expressed well. i liked this, good job.  You can close your eyes to things you dont want to see,but u cant close your heart to things you dont want to feel. |
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SuperSonic Junior Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 16Northern Ireland |
Awwww that is sooooo sweet. As a die hard romantic, (the last of a dying breed) I liked this a lot. Well done! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is such a beautiful picture of a magical night! We all have that memory... *sigh*, lol! great imagery... I hope you're still with this person!!! Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us. |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
 Go katie! I loved it! You did awesome!  |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
hey KT this was really kewl!!GUESS WHO BURPED AT ME YESTERDAY AND HE SAT ON THE TABLE NEXT TO ME TODAY!?!?!HEEEEEEEEEEHEEEEEE john tonkavich  heehee anywayz yea i liked this  "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Awww  I am a Knight who says Ni! |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
For future reference, proof read. It tends to throw people who are reading poetry for the sake of poetry off when there is a misspelling in the very first line. Casey |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
I would be lying if i said that this was anything less than a beautiful write. Great use of imagery and i can't wait for that moment. Chris |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey katya or however u spell it in hawaiin(i think that is what u said) this was really good ~samantha~ |
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