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Teen Poetry #6

Sin Tax

Imajica
Junior Member

since 2002-09-16

Posts 14
NM, USA

0 posted 2002-11-07 07:11 PM

Holy art thou government
That depleats its nations God
From its nations pride and joy
But taxes smut
And the cigarettes they mass produce
To mass murder
The mass population
That elects them to their chairs.

"Is there a superintendent of the spaceship, Luke"
-APS Superinteddent Brad Allison

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

1 posted 2002-11-07 09:02 PM

Cigarettes...cancer sticks...EEeeew...but then again thats just me. Very true write you have going here. Nice job

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

2 posted 2002-11-09 04:30 PM

Imajica-

A very truthful write.^^ The repetition of "mass" gives a good strength to the piece. The only line I didn't really catch was:

"But taxes smut"

Didn't really understand the use of "smut" in that context. o_O;
Keep up the great writing!

Leah

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-11-10 01:06 AM

Very well written. The title is clever and the poem is a witty, condescending apostrophe...

Very cool writing.

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

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