Teen Poetry #6 |
My Path |
roxywrestlegirl04 Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 74good ole DINWIDDIE |
the wind makes the waves wander up to the beach they fumble and fizz as they crash on the shore the moon highlights my way throught the wandering waves as i find the path to the way i was before |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
liked this one is was nice and short (i hate those long poems that drone on even if they are good i cant follow them)but i could follow this one and i have to say that i liked it alot good write keep postin "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
I liked the thoughts. Good job with this one, and I agree about the long poems that drone on. I'm not sure if I have said hello yet, but just incase, Welcome! Laura Real friends are those who, when you feel you've made a fool of yourself, don't feel you've done a permanent job. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hmmm... I like this one. I thought that the last line should be seperated into two, but I do like this one |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Contrary to Skyfire, I like the unity of the last line. You did well on this. Good work. Parasite |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
roxywrestlegirl04~ I really enjoyed reading this. Very nice imagery here. Nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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