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Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

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0 posted 2002-09-19 11:37 PM

He has a way
of making you smile
as he is tearing you apart.
Set in your ways
stubborn and direct
sturdy as pure steel-
until he whispers your name.
And then his eyes
meet yours.
And his fingers
graze your hair.
Then all the determination
in the world
cannot save you-
from his kiss.

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

1 posted 2002-09-19 11:40 PM

This was great. Well written, and well expressed. That and the fact that I've been there before... sort of... I just have issues... LOL

Match
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since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

2 posted 2002-09-19 11:41 PM

We are all drawn to "his" kiss

liked it

~*Azi*~

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2002-09-20 12:00 PM

*pokes* 'ello

Strength woman! Strength and power. Nicely written as per usual. I'm liking your change in style, Jenn. Any sort of emotional attachment sickens me but you write it well so I can let that go for now.

nice to be replying to your work again. Keep 'em coming.

~AF~

"No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
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4 posted 2002-09-20 09:35 AM

WOOOOHOOOOOOOOO someone's BACK!!!

Missed ya Lizzy.

Thanks everyone for replying to this; gotta get my mind out of this emotional rut...damn I'm acting like a girl sheeessshhhhhhh.

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

5 posted 2002-09-20 11:13 AM

This is oddly negative... I much enjoy how you take such a universally positive thing as a "kiss" and imply that you must somehow be "saved" from it.

You very accurately conveyed your message, and it is one with which I am in agreement: that will is something very fragile, and can be shattered even with no intention at all.

Nicely done.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-10-18 01:39 PM

Oh...I'm liking this very much.
Very well said, Jenn.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

7 posted 2002-10-18 01:43 PM

Great job Jenn!!!

Ri

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2002-10-18 08:14 PM

Yeah i liked this poem a lot. Very different from what I'm used to reading here. Muchly appreciated read. More!

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

StellarChica
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since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

9 posted 2002-10-18 11:16 PM

This was good. Yes. I liked it a lot.

*~erin~*

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

10 posted 2002-10-18 11:32 PM

wow. just as my dahling liz said, you are changing your style. well, adventuring at least.

and i must say je suis tres content!! damn pc's and all of their crazy french grammar codes that i'm way too lazy to learn. at school they have them taped to the wall. ::big grin::

great job girl!!

at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin.

and then i read it.

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