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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
I stand here crying, Trying to understand. Why I’m alone, Why I’m not having fun with all of you. I want to scream, But that might draw attention to myself. I want to hurt myself, But the most I’m going to do is get a paper cut. I want to kill, Something that doesn’t matter. But of course, I can’t and I wouldn’t. Pain is only what you make of it, They keep telling me. If it’s only what we make of it, Then how come when you calm it still hurts SO bad. When I cry, I try to hold the tears back. Even though that won’t last. All the memories, Bring tears to my eyes. I try to hide what I feel, So you won’t feel sorry for me. But I can’t help but cry, And mumble the words “Life sucks, Happiness is vastly over rated!” You ask me what’s wrong, And I tell you that nothing is going right. You try to make me feel better, But nothing helps. I cry until I actually start to feel okay. But that’s when I realize, I have to be all alone tonight. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sorry guys I know that it sucks..but it's just how I feel at the moment... I'll put a GOOD poem up soon...don't worry... I know it sucks...So If your all like "this isn't the greatest poem!" i'll be posting a better one today or tomorrow since im going to be alone and i'll have ALOT of time on my hands! |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
This poem was very emotional. It screams with frustration, anger and pain, something you did very well putting to words. Being the first poem I recall reading from you, I dont know if this poem doesn't compare to your other works. So don't think that this poem isnt as 'good' as your others. Because it is a 'good' poem.  Loved this bit:quote: I hope everything is ok, if not.. email me if you want to talk. (tiff) “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
This is a good poem indeed, It is very emotional. And sometimes thats all you need is emotion and truth to guide you. You write on your sleeve, what your feeling you put down and thats very good. And it also turns into some beutiful poems. Muy Bueno Polita, Darkness |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
See how everyone reassures you when you note that your poem is no good? I should start doing that, I'd get a way better response that way...  I like this though, Pollita. It's good to sometimes just drip your emotions out, with zero regard for quality. I do that to, but I never post it myself... hee... Anyhow, nice writing. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Mmmm...don't worry Delaney! This wasn't too bad...not at all! Although the "I want to hurt myself" line will be abit tricky for the DMs---it'll pass! I wanna talk about this via MSN---alright? Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht! |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Okay alex we'll talk about this on msn... *sits here waiting* "La la la la la" i wonder when alex is going to be online...La Fa lalalala Do Did He Doh! Okay im going on msn now so whenever alex signs on i'll talk to him! *waiting until i can't sit anymore* ...alex better be on soon! |
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