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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

0 posted 2002-10-23 09:34 PM

I want you to be my best friend and my boyfriend too
But I will never be able to tell this to you
If you're in love with some popular girl
I don't compare with any of them
So go let me see you we can just stay friends
Even though I wanted to see our friendship bend
Into a little more than just best friends
Maybe hold my hand once in a while
Put my phone number on your speed dial
And then love me
Like I love you

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2002-10-23 09:35 PM

I didn't like this one alot but I hope everyone else does....:-\

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-24 03:04 PM

This is cute, kind of reminds me of something I would expect to read in a love letter that falls out of my locker, or something...

I think it's obvious that what you were going for in this poem was a simple expression of feeling, and you've accomplished that quite well. Nicely done and keep posting.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

3 posted 2002-10-24 04:32 PM

Cath,
Now that I know its you.....LOL I liked this. IS it about "someone very special with a spine" lol. I have a suggestion......Maybe if I were writing this I would`ve made all of the lines rhyme or none ryme. Just a thought.I liked it tho.Good job! Keep postin.

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

4 posted 2002-10-24 04:53 PM

hey,
ok...
this wasnt my fav out of yours but i really liked it, actually i dont know what my fave one is cuz they are all really really good
good write(i cant say my experience or feelings or somthin like that cuz i wasnt asked, learned that in fcs today, actually i think it was just for a conversation)
it seems familiar to me
u no, not bein able to compare to those popular grls
anywayz i will stop writin a book and just put 2 words to sum it up, wait maybe 3, yea 3
really good write
~sam~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2002-10-25 04:05 PM

I thought this was pretty well done. I hope to read more from you

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New Member

since 2002-10-27

Posts 2
Indiana, USA

6 posted 2002-10-27 06:35 PM

It was good but cathy come on you can do better!

~Kate~

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

7 posted 2002-11-02 11:03 PM

"Aand i will love you more than that- i wont say the words, and take them back, dont let lonelyness advance" or soemthing like that...
i hate the backstreet boys, but your poem reminded me of them..those little pansies- in the fields of flowers..
aww.. i like flowers.
(lol, good cover!)
good work, man.. besides the backstreetboysish title.

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