Teen Poetry #6 |
Requiem |
Surreal Junior Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 35Paris |
I had a dream…. That I flew last night, right past the gentle curve of your arms And the thorns tore through my skin Revealing the pulsing heart underneath the wings “Why do you weep my love? Is summer not long enough for you to hold a tear?” And the dove sighed in protest As if the broken fingers seeking redemption were an echo Of yesterday’s solemn goodbye Counting the days by the colors of your hair isn’t something I can remark upon frequently It just seems sinful to turn a language into a requiem And there you are, green eyes and wholesome skin But not so whole as first appeared, as my fingers dip through the illusion (Forsake the dream and fall into today) It’s so hard to listen to myself when I know I’m right Glory is a silent thing-- Mineral |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is sad... and oh-so well written. I read this over three times and intend to read it a few more times after I post this reply. I love your style, the depth of your words... the way you phrase everything. About how it seems sinful to turn a language into a requiem... that is so profound... really made me sit up and take notice of the poem. This poem rings of creativity and talent of which I am envious... I do applaud you and am elated that you've made your nest in the Teen forum. I can't wait to read more from you. This poem is my private library entry for today. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I find your pieces to be very thought provoking and profound. I really love your style. Your poems impress me, well the 2 that i've seen Well done on this one. This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
Beautiful, just beautiful, i enjoyed this very much, it flowed well and you phrasing was eloquent and origional, well done and I will look forward to reading more from you, Anya |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
This poem was one of the best I've read. I love your style. You think deep, and I hope to read more from you. Very nice poem Incredible Darkness |
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SailorFirebird Junior Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 1615 Miles North of NoWhere |
one word...awesome! you've really made me think. which, i admit is a hard thing to do. I am Sailor Firebird! Defender of...ummm, STUFF! Behold my clarinet, vito, and the wrath of a squeeky reed! |
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