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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2002-10-22 05:37 PM

brown
frosted
little leaves
falling to the ground
dumb
boring
stupid life
falling into my hands
will i ever understand?
will i ever comprehend?
too much pressure
responsibility
hate
life
death
rex

Jester
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 41
The dark corners of your mind

1 posted 2002-10-22 07:00 PM

this was a good poem. I think the use of one word lines really helped to make it powerful. Although I am a bit confused by "rex" I just don't seem to get it. Thanx for the read

I am your God, will you kill me now or shall I be continually suicidal?

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

2 posted 2002-10-22 08:15 PM

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!
it says his name.
How How How How Sweeeet!
You should give this to him.
Speaking of 'him'... heh-
I want you to tell him, i mean, WILL you tell him for me, since your so cool??
I thought so!
lol
But I really liked this.
YOu get better everytime I read, and other stuff.
(That sounds comforting!)
and i leave you with... a face thing..

(^^Mike after the football game)

"Sometimes, somethings turn into dumb things, and that's when you put your foot down."

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

3 posted 2002-10-22 09:56 PM

allison-
this is really good
is rex #1 now???
thats really sweet how that says his name
every1 will be like what is rex (lol)
but this was a good write as they say,(my punctuation)no it is a fantastic write!!!
keep writin
~sam~

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-10-23 11:01 AM

I took it as some kind of weird spelling of "wrecks." Guess the poem was more positive than I thought...

This is an interesting style. I remember in Teen #3 when there was a brief fascination with one-word-per-line poetry. That'd make an interesting challenge for this forum... hmmm...

Well done, nonetheless. I enjoyed reading this.

Parasite

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2002-10-23 01:11 PM

I didn't get the 'rex' part.
ANyhow, I liked the poem. Not the best I think I've read from you, but nonetheless a good write.
Hope to read some more soon.

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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

6 posted 2002-10-23 05:22 PM

I liked this one even though I don't understand the 'rex'part.I've liked some of your other poems better but I liked this one too so keep wrighting.

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

7 posted 2002-10-23 06:21 PM

rex is this guy that i like. just thought i`d clear that up. lol

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

8 posted 2002-10-23 09:25 PM

'Ello....this is cool. I liked it, and it totally relates...corny huh? Well it does, I ain't lien ( sp? ) :P

Riley

~*I'm not gonna say I'm gorgeous, that for you to decide, if you really wanna know me, see the world through my eyes*~

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2002-10-26 12:17 PM

devinechild22~
Woohoo for me! I actually understood the 'rex' part! lol
You really did a nice job on this one.
I enjoyed reading it.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

10 posted 2002-10-27 07:58 PM

Wow great job Allison! This one is very good! Good work! Keep it up! From your sis Chrissy

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