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Thoughts 2 (Plz Read) |
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Inioth Junior Member
since 2003-09-18
Posts 12Calgary, Alberta |
Hey Everyone here are 2 more of my poems Hope you enjoy them, these 2 both mean a lot to me. Thought 13 (Swallowed) Can you hear it? like a symphony of screams you'll never let go, it's yours like a parasite you'll hold on to the end Utill I am swallowed Until my world dissolves before me, and even then you are latched I can't see clearly anymore, are you still there? am I finially free? Never.... This one I did for a friend whom I care for very much. Thought 6 (Shannon) Why can you never see? The beauty you have inside it bleeds from every pore The people that don't see it, they don't deserve it They would betray it all in the end anyway and then you'd hurt more. Why can you never see?? maybe it's different for me, the outside, looking in but I don't have to see, because I knew it all along..... [This message has been edited by Inioth (09-19-2003 10:01 AM).] |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
I liked them.. both very full of emotion. Once again I would say the second was my fave but both were good.  |
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Nia New Member
since 2003-09-18
Posts 4Canada |
Hey!! I like them both too but again I like the first one better lol. It's filled with emotion and I think alot of people can relate to it. Good work!! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I can't pick which one I like better this time. They are both very good, I love them both. Especially the first 2 lines of the first poem. Excellent job!  WinterWren |
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