Teen Poetry #6 |
Fish Food For Thought |
Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
~*~ The reference to buying stuff isn't towards alcohol or drugs, it's about food ~*~ Choker and chains black collar and beads... wreck my nails? I don't think so, hunny; you'll be buyin' me some of that stuff I usually buy for you... (walk me to the class from Hell and I might forgive you) Black clothing and blue-black hair blood red nail polish, black makeup and red black lipstick (come over and help me feed my fish - I kinda have a lot) I'll wear my black tank top and your tie; and maybe let up on the lipstick for once I'll think about wearing your grey hoodie to bring some colour to my life or I'll just wear my scarf (and we'll go riding into the sunrise, cause the sunset is too cliche) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Hey, Rhonda~ You already know that I love this poem. I really enjoyed the way it takes off in so many different directions. It's a bit 'off the wall' and I like that. Very cool. The imagery was great. I could see it all. I could just picture you all gothed out..lol. Awesome write, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky P.S. Great title too! "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Rhonda? Gothed out? I'd never have known... I like how you used clothing to kind of describe certain aspects of yourself... that was pretty creative of you, reminded me of Macbeth sorta... Nice work, Rhonda. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
*frowns* *smiles* I like this it's very off beat and quite different to your usual writings. Thank you for sharing this with us Andrew |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
* smiles * Great write, talk to you later? * hugs * Riley ~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~ |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
You already know the most important of my thoughts on this poem. So, I won't bother repeating them. By the way, damn! The new pic is lovely, me dear. Sincerely, Ti "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hehe I liked the ending of it. The sunset is too cliche. Well done on the poem. This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I'm thinking this one deserves another bump to the top. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (10-25-2002 05:47 AM).] |
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