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SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

0 posted 2003-09-02 10:34 PM

wake in the middle of the night
say my name in a whisper
just once more
and just once more
lay awake until morning
slowly realizing i'm not there

write me a letter
filled with promises and regrets
just once more
and just once more
pretend that every written word
holds some hidden feeling

sing me a song
composed in a minor key
just once more
and just once more
play each sad chord
as the melody falls from your eyes

tell me what i want to hear
that this distance makes you weak
just one more
and just once more
ask me if i love you
and let me be afraid to answer.

[just once more i'm putting this all behind me]

[This message has been edited by SimpleDiscourse (09-02-2003 10:48 PM).]

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-09-03 07:46 PM

I honestly can't believe that no one has replied to this poem yet!

Anyways...THIS WAS FANTASTIC! "Just once more" added so much effect to this piece. Really, I'm not sure what to say because I'm speechless! WONDERFUL WORK! This is def. going in my library!!! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

2 posted 2003-09-03 07:52 PM

I would have replied sooner but I just now read this peice. I love how you put all the emotion into it, I take it the relationship went bad. Wonderful write!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

3 posted 2003-09-03 08:03 PM

actually we're still really good friends but i'm still kinda stuck on those days when he had feelings for me and i still kinda have feelings for him but he's over me and..blah blah blah. this is me putting it to a close i guess. thanks for reading. i'm glad you enjoyed it.

cuda04
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 46
Wisconsin,USA

4 posted 2003-09-03 10:56 PM

I am sorry to say i can relate to this poem, entirely...i loved it.

Always look forward, never look back, dreams are much more refreshing than regrets.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-09-04 01:38 AM

Very beautiful poem!! Im just amazed by this. Not one word is out of place!
I really love this poem, sooo much, and I can relate to it too.
I especially love the line,"as the melody fall from your eyes."
Beautiful. A true work of art.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

6 posted 2003-09-04 01:36 PM

Nice job on consistency... beautiful poem.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

7 posted 2003-09-04 06:39 PM

This was great. nice work.

I hate everything about you!
Why do I love you?
You hate everything about me!
Why do you love me?~3 Days Grace

sixington
Member

since 2003-07-14

Posts 53
Utah

8 posted 2003-09-29 08:24 PM

I absolutely loved the repitition in this poem. i can't think of anything to say. Props to you, that was beautiful.

shara
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 69
florida/USA

9 posted 2003-09-30 09:06 AM

girl, tis poem is soooooooooo good, loolk forward to more of your writes, be blessed.

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