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Halcyon Junior Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 43Arizona, USA |
Teardrops I see something shining In those pretty eyes of yours, Something that's also forming in mine. After everything we've had and been through, We promised everything would be fine. But nothing really was As it seemed, and what I saw Suddenly became so unclear. Life became such a blur to me Each and every time we came near. Droplets form between Those two eyes of yours, But please don't wipe them away. In all my sadness and sorrows, These feelings are here to stay. Come with me and let The teardrops run together, Flowing in an endless stream. Our affections will always be remembered Like the end of a forgotten dream. But the tears hold fast to That beautiful face of yours, And cling to a love that never wants to let go. There are just so many things I want to tell you, So much that I want to let you know. I don't want us to part Like this, if we had to go our Separate paths you and I. Because when that happens our tears will fall, The moment we say goodbye. -=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=- Hey everyone. Here's my first post here in a while after summer full of saying goodbye to old friendships and welcoming new ones. This was written for someone I hold dear in my heart, someone I think about whenever I do just about anything. We haven't been quite so open recently as we were before, but I hope it won't be like this for long. Without her, nothing I do would have a reason to exist. On a brighter note, me and a friend are in the process of composing this into a song, with a piano for the background. The poem will be used as the lyrics, with the fourth stanza being the chorus. Some parts might have to be changed to flow with the music, and not to sound too strained. Maybe I'll post a recording of it when it's finished. (She's going to be singing it)  [This message has been edited by Halcyon (08-25-2003 07:02 AM).] |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
This poem was absolutely amazing. I couldn't love a poem more. It hit home so well. I really liked this. Nice job. Definitely going into my library. "I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..." |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
wow this one is amazing.. I can also totally relate to it. Definately one of the best poems I have read on here.. way to go and good luck with the song |
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SenSitiveSaLLy New Member
since 2003-08-24
Posts 5in an alternate universe |
i loved your poem!! it reminds me how truely lucky we are to have people in our lives who leave an impact on us... its a great reminder -- thanks wish there was something i could say or do, i can resist anything but temptation from you.. but i'd rather fall myself than let you drag me down. it w |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
This poem is simply elegant, it has a haunting beauty that touches the spirit, nicely done, it will sound beautiful as a song and I like the notation of insperation, you may say goodbye to the people but there memories will be in the heart forever...sigh..ok I'm get philisophical time for me to be quiet! ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
Beautifully written, and amazing how i could understand it so deeply |
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Halcyon Junior Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 43Arizona, USA |
But being philosophical is a good thing.. I think  Thanks everyone for the comments, I appreciate it. |
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