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Teen Poetry #6

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BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

0 posted 2003-08-21 09:40 AM

This is a short collection of haiku's. This is my first attempt at doing a "collection" sorry forgive me for them not bwing very good. -Jen

I. The Look
Souls surface through eyes
the inner depths are revealed
shows your love to me.

II. The Feel
Feelings know no end
barriers are broken down
love from deep inside.

III. The Kiss
Takes my breath away
lips meet in joyous union
momentary bliss.

IV. The Touch
Eyes locked, sweet embrace
outer shell meets warm insides
passion from within.

V. The Love
Journey into love
broken through the icey flames
warms the heart again.

Android 18
Member

since 2002-02-20

Posts 61
Austrailia (My DreamLand)

1 posted 2003-08-22 03:45 AM

I thought this is a pretty good haikus... better than what I can do. I haven't written one of those in a long time. I really enjoyed it.

"You think you have won, you think all is well, but kiss my green ass, I'll see you in hell" - The Grinch

sixington
Member

since 2003-07-14

Posts 53
Utah

2 posted 2003-08-23 12:36 PM

Nice write! i especialy like "the kiss" keep it up. ~ Amanda

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2003-08-26 03:58 PM

I've never been a big fan of haikus...then again, I never read them in a collection. This I enjoyed very much. Each part came together to make a very good, deep poem. The imagery was beautiful.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

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