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eternalblu
Junior Member
since 2003-08-17
Posts 11
Pennsylvania, US

0 posted 2003-08-19 05:16 PM


Concentration
Sleepless nights
Constant headaches
Wrongs not rights
What is this familiar tune
That plays in my mind
As I watch the rising of the moon
And know I am confined

My pain shows no limits
Even though I have no room
No space to grow stronger roots
I am just meant for doom
I take abuse constantly
It happens day to day
I have tried to wait patiently
But I am being led astray

People think I've gone crazy
The doctor says so too
They put me on more pills today
But I refuse to take more than two
Beaten, scorned, wished away
Disowned by loved ones
Some people have pity and pray
But most wish I?d die and be done

I fear for my state of mind
As I wander down this path
The pain is so bad I am now blind
I have reached the end of pain?s wrath
I?m sorry for the pain I've caused
When I went through my own
But now it?s over and I am gone
And I watch as no one mourns

It's easier to run
Replacing this pain with something numb
It's easier to go
Then face all this pain here all alone...

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BabieDoll
Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
1 posted 2003-08-19 05:21 PM


This is a VERY good poem. I can relate, not completely, but all too well. This is one of the few poems that I have read that made sense with a rhyme. Great first post!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

eternalblu
Junior Member
since 2003-08-17
Posts 11
Pennsylvania, US
2 posted 2003-08-19 06:10 PM


Thank you so much! When I first saw that I had a reply I was nervous about reading it but now I feel a lot better about posting.  Thanks!

It's easier to run
Replacing this pain with something numb
It's easier to go
Then face all this pain here all alone...

Spine Grinder
Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...
3 posted 2003-08-19 08:41 PM


I really really REALLY liked this, I can also relate, not entirely, but mostly, and this was a very good first post. I also like your signature, thats one of my favorite songs, nice choice.

"Is there anyone out there cause it's getting harder and harder to breathe"~Maroon 5~

eternalblu
Junior Member
since 2003-08-17
Posts 11
Pennsylvania, US
4 posted 2003-08-19 11:24 PM


Wow you guys are really nice here! Thanks a lot, and I like Harder to Breathe by Maroon 5 also

It's easier to run
Replacing this pain with something numb
It's easier to go
Then face all this pain here all alone...

BrokenDreams
Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
5 posted 2003-08-20 08:50 PM


I guess this is getting kind of repetative by now, but I have to say it to, LoL, I can relate to it for the most part, but not completely. Good write, and htanks for the read.

"To handle yourself, use your head;yo handle others, use your heart." -Donald Laird

SilentTears
Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
6 posted 2003-08-20 11:31 PM


I very much enjoyed this. Sometimes, I think everyone feels they can relate. This was very depressing...and it rang all too true. But trust me, there's always someone who would miss you!

By the way...great first post! It's going in my library! Keep 'em comin'!

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

eternalblu
Junior Member
since 2003-08-17
Posts 11
Pennsylvania, US
7 posted 2003-08-21 11:16 AM


Thanks everyone!  And don't worry silent tears, when I get a chance I'll post more.  I have at least 30 poems that I've written.  I have much of that creative juice flowin
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