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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-08-18 12:43 PM

You embedded your distrust-
Into me.

I CAN STILL FEEL YOU!

All your malicious acts against me are-
Tattooed upon my memory.

I can never forget you.

'Cuz of you my heart is ice-
Surrounded by walls of steel.

I can never forgive you.

Your voice still echoes in my head-
Like a re-occurring nightmare.

I can still see you.

So unfortunate was our relationship-
Ending so quickly.

I CAN STILL FEEL YOU!

But, oh, how I wish I couldn’t..

"Is there anyone out there cause it's getting harder and harder to breathe"~Maroon 5~

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

1 posted 2003-08-18 01:05 PM

This was a really neat poem, I like the style of the poem.. it really caught my eye how you made the line "I can still feel you" stand out so well. Good job!

Pollita
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

2 posted 2003-08-19 10:30 PM

I liked this...I felt this way before, and still do, although for me..It wasnt a full fledged relationship...He still was in my heart, and is now..but he will never leave my heart...Somedays its great...the rest of the days its a nightmare...like me digging my grave and jumping into it, screaming fer someone to burry me...Lol...but I think I've said too much...great write!! thanks fer the read.

* A wise monkey never monkies with another monkey's monkey *

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-08-20 11:26 PM

Ooo...I like this Staci. And I'm pretty sure I know who this is about. Either way...great poem. Flowed well. Nice use of vocab. Great write! Love's.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

lovergirl
Junior Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 12

4 posted 2003-08-31 09:58 PM

That was a cool poem. A lot of anger too. I know how you feel. There was this guy in my school who always wanted to put me down and scare me half to deaht. Oh, and by the way, Suger Cult is pretty cool

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

5 posted 2003-09-01 07:11 PM

The last line put the icing on the cake for this one! LOL. Sad, but great! Good work, Staci! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

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