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Cease To Torment
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Cease To Torment |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
I'm not certain about the title! I was thinking maybe "Unceasing Torment"...tell me what ya think! It's just the right time, Lights grow dim, My mood changes as I exhale, You are too long gone, Lost touch with any feeling, Any feeling of compassion, Rotting away to a simple nothing, Lifeless and out of touch, Hidden, you feel terrible, Yet, show no sign of any care, Pushing it away I quickly escape, Escape from reality and true feeling, I wade through my abyss of tears, Only to finish where I began. "At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
hey I really like this one, it describes a lot of how I've been feeling lately actually. Very good work. I like the title "unceasing torment" |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
yeah..this was very good. I could see myself in this poem. Thanks for sharing.  |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
LOVED the last line...GREAT job hun! Love ya! ~J.Lynn  "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Ooo. I like. You read this to me over the phone this past week, but I like it just as much now as I did then. Beautiful! Love's."I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..." |
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