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Teen Poetry #6

Into The Darkness

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member

since 2003-02-19

Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-08-12 02:53 PM

Into the darkness,
I can pour out my fears.
Subtle my heart,
And cry all my tears.

Into the darkness,
Where I run to be alone,
Light cannot be kindled;
I'm safe here; and home.

Into the darkness,
From the valleys of despair,
From the horrors of the world,
Life hanging by a hair;

But into the darkness
When my life around me is hurled,
When my heart is hard or blistered,
I can soon again face the world.

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-08-12 06:58 PM

Facing the world is hard to do...

I dig it.

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member

since 2003-02-19

Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2004-07-05 02:52 AM

thankx everyone for your lovely comments

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

3 posted 2004-07-09 10:14 PM

I like this poem, you did a good job. The only weak points I noticed in the flow were in the second line of the second stanza and middle two lines of the last stanza. Those did not read as easily in my mind as the rest of the write which flowed very, very nicely. Awesome job here, thanks for sharing.

"Be the Change you wish to see in the world" -Ghandi

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