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HeroicVillan
Junior Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-08-10 10:59 PM

darkness creeping, round my room
goddess stitching from her loom
making demons, cold and shadowed
sent them off and darkness followed
covered up their haunting path
bringing down her awful wrath
upon my simple motral shoulders
her endless anger sat and smouldered
when finally this onslaught ended
my pride of self could not be mended
so now i live my life in doubt
with darkened angels all about

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

1 posted 2003-08-12 03:16 AM

i really liked this piece. the way you used the words was grate. keep writing

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

Tequilia_Sunrise
Senior Member

since 2003-02-19

Posts 612
Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2003-08-13 10:20 PM

Sad........ good write

Thankx

Tequilia

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-08-14 12:27 PM

goddess stitching from her loom
making demons, cold and shadowed

amazing imagery, and a sad but wonderfully written piece. I enjoyed it imensly, thank you for sharing
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

4 posted 2003-08-15 10:34 PM

WOW! I really liked this! The rhyme scheme was BEAUTIFUL! This one's definitely going in my library for future reading!

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

5 posted 2003-08-16 08:26 PM

*sits down in shock*

I have GOT to try that! Awesomeness...

-Lioness

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

6 posted 2003-08-17 04:00 AM

hey,
this was pretty cool, interesting format. maybe try to fix your typos though because they kind of distract from the goodness of the piece. well done though.
-bergundy-

no one can make you feel inferior, unless you let them.--eleanor roosevelt

Xelorz
Junior Member

since 2003-08-16

Posts 10
Burlington, Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2003-08-17 09:31 AM

A nice read with a good ryhme scheme.

~Xelorz

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