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What i miss
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What i miss |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
I miss those arms around me. I don't miss the effort you didn't put in. Lazy sunday afternoons in bed with you. Then waiting for you to call. The mostly sexy but sometimes meaningful looks you gave. Not knowing when i'd see you next. Feeling like the only girl in your world. I don't miss being pushed. I wasn't quite there... but you couldn't quite understand. That's all I was to you. I wasn't ready until it was too late Months latter it happened and it felt so right. It never felt right with adam, it felt uncomfortable and wrong. I never felt exposed and shut out with you. Now i don't want either of you i want to brake away and be free. be free from all that you are to me. ............... i don't think i like this much but yeah i thought it was about time i posted. i'm not sure if i know any of you i haven't been around here for a while so yeah. sorry this is pretty shocking! |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
ha ha, good right dude. excellent for sure. ha ha, i am the one. |
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Ankaria Junior Member
since 2003-07-26
Posts 35Sask. Canada |
Not shocking at all. I know how you feel!  I like how you were so honest and upfront. Nice job.Ankaria |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
hmmm...I think the first stanza is my favorite, I know that feeling! I think every woman does. While the flow seemed a but choppy in some places this piece seemed very heart felt, very "real" if that makes any sense. A lot of poetry while it is good, sounds more like an illusion while the feelings here truley seemed from the heart. Enjoyable read. ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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