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xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

0 posted 2003-07-28 10:03 PM

This thread
serves as a simple reminder
a constant in chaos
pulling so weakly
when i feel lost
this thread
weaves the fabric
of a distant reality
something that could exist
between you and me
that begs me to let
go of rationality
take the risk
and do whats
compelling me
this thread
its driving me
its the life of me
it is my reminder
here that i am not
alone
this thread
is shared
stitches
that keep
the hole
from seperating
falling out
and disipating
this thread is the life im anticipating
"in our dreams we are connected
siamese twins, at the wrist.."

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2003-07-28 11:16 PM

I just saw this and thought Id reply

Its good I liked it. And since I suck too I cant critique it in a way that would be helpful.

GIS

a trickle of music from a well
let it spill roar like hell

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-07-29 12:50 PM

makaveli...

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

3 posted 2003-07-29 03:47 PM

"Makaveli"
lol
~Tori

Be happy, and respectful, dont forget about those ones that will always love you no matter how much you screw up!

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-07-29 07:40 PM

THE END! I love the end. At first I was confused, but then I realized what you were refering to. This had an excellent flow. And a great theme. I loved it.
~Lex..

Jaime

Registered

Member
Posts 250

5 posted 2003-07-31 12:25 PM

Here.

I already told you, but she reappears when she wants and she wants.

I like this and not just because it has to do with me. Mmm.. yeah, I like the flow, which is generally present in most of your writing. In some better than others.. this was a better. (a slippery butter) If you ever stop writing I'll be so mad at you. You're much better than I am. Mine are gone just as quickly as they are cut from the cord, but yours are lingering. Like tattooed fat guys and leather ladies hanging out at bars. (And you know how much I love tattoos and leather.)

Something I can feel.

jaime.

the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots

[This message has been edited by Jaime (07-31-2003 12:30 AM).]

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