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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
You looked into my eyes Searching for things that are no longer there The sparks of hope The glimmer of happiness The pit of anguish The well of sorrow The fires of love The icy depths of hatred you searched again and again but could find nothing, finally you looked into my eyes and asked "Why?.." a hint of confusion in your voice, you repeated it this time saying, "Why can't you love me? Do you even feel?!" my face remained unchanged I simply replied "Rocks don't feel" Tears streamed down your face as I turned away How could you have known of those before you, who sought out those same signs the women who melted the icy depths of hatred blew out the fires of passion drowned me in the well of sorrow locked me away in the pit of anguish basked in the glimmer of happiness then trampled the sparks of hope How could you have known that hearts become rocks when all the signs of life are destroyed. |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
wow, this was an excellent write.... quote: loved this part and quote: these two parts were my favorite....great write, lots and lots of emotion came through......nice choice of words also! riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Nice. Very nice...! I don't have much else to say other than that. I'm lost for words... ~Jess  "At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Woah. Very powerful poem. The imagery is perfect. I really love this one, especially the last 4 lines. Well done. WinterWren |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I really felt what you were saying in this piece, and you worded it beautifully. So sad... I loved it. ~Lex..  |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
rocks huh? *hatred laughs like french man and agrees with paragon* |
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