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lil cherry
Member

since 2002-10-02

Posts 86
Ont, Can.

0 posted 2003-07-24 02:10 AM

this is a poem/song i wrote to the tune of "the rose"- bette midler.....

My eyes will never see you
The way that they used to

My eyes will never know
The love we used to share

And they will see a boy standing there
Without a girl by his side

Because I cannot be with you
No I must be free

My Eyes will long to see you
And the love you hold inside

My eyes will long to watch you
Caress my tender skin

But I know that this will never be
Because I must be on my own

But my eyes will miss the look you give
When I stare into your eyes

My eyes can see right through you
And feel all the love

My eyes share my secrets
With the one who can read them

I don’t care that you know me
The way that no one does

I miss the times that I sat there
And stared into your eyes

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2003-07-24 02:57 AM

Nice very much enjoyed

-ash

I'm just kickin it up

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

2 posted 2003-07-24 10:44 AM

Good poem.

The future isn't now, that was yesterday.

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

3 posted 2003-07-24 01:32 PM

nice write.

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

4 posted 2003-07-25 01:07 AM

You know I don't have any idea that song ever existed. I would've liked your version better anyways... gave a little jump in my heart. Sometimes you wish that one person is thinking that about you in every way. Thanks for the hope.....

NJS

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-07-26 11:01 PM

I like this the best of all that I've read from you..it felt so honest. I like how in the end you talk about missing looking into his eyes. great job..
~Lex

[This message has been edited by Lexy (07-26-2003 11:02 PM).]

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

6 posted 2003-07-26 11:47 PM

the last two lines pulled it all together...great job

riley

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

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