Teen Poetry #6 |
Is this life? |
Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
I sit here wondering, If this is all life's about, The pain,the wishes,the dreams, Nothing is really solid, All seems to live in the mind. Right before i sleep at night, I pause to wonder, What the next day will be like, But deep inside i know, I dont need any thinking, Cos it'll be the same old thing, Pain, Wishes and dreams, Seems like all i ever get. But when i really look within, And in the silence hear the still voice, Telling me its not the end, And that life isnt all about dreams, But that life is a process, A step-by-step process, Where all comes in its own time. So suddenly my eyes are opened, And i realize all i have to do is wait, For the Lord to bring me joy, In his own appointed time, And until then, I should live in my dreams, And learn from my pains... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
"Dear lord guide me, protect me, allumen a lamp in my heart and make of me a brilliant star. Thou art the all knowing, the all powerful, the all wise. Amen" This is a prayer I used to say before I went to bed at night as a child and for some reason it popped into my head while reading this. The poem is lovely, and well written. It's wonderful to see you put your faith in god and know that he will bring you through the pain to your dreams ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This was a very good write. It was a good example of effective narrative poetry. The imagery was great and it was clear and honest. Well done. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
i love the end, excellent advice, even if you didnt mean it that way. good write. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
I am at awe... I don't know how many words and thoughts you took from many of us. Its amazing being able to pluck that from your mind. I am with you on this point of view all the way to the very end. Theres just some of those days.... NJS |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Woah. I can relate to this poem soooo well. Very good job, it flowed together perfectly. I love it! It's going in my library. WinterWren |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
this is a very touching poem...i guess we will all just have to learn from all the pains we get in life, huh. wonderful write. riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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chicken Junior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 44 |
i think every1 can relate to this poem in they`re own way! enjoyed the read, thanx |
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