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Something human
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Something human |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I breathe in the breath they breathe out. Living off the excess of their happiness, cause we know they have some to spare. Choking it down, Living off their poison. But it feels so good, in my stomach. And I know I'm dying, but I don't mind. I stare into their faces.. Feeding off of their smiles, swallowing down their laughter. Hoping to spark something human within myself [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-21-2003 08:33 PM).] |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
very intense... good tho. watch spelling... otherwise it was pretty good. the first line was confusing but once i understood it, it was good. nice job ~cassi |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i do agree, intense, i liked it... "in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums" |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I agree totally, this is a very deep and intense poem, and most assuredly a poem bound for my library. I understand the depth of emotions behind those words all to well: you described my life. Keep on writing. I hope to see more from you here, should I return. 'Rich' always here with you. Now stay and hold my hand and together we'll go somewhere new. ~Rich~ |
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Gabkicks Junior Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 13 |
Good poem. |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
nice read. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Sucking down the existense of everyone all around you to find life? Ohh the humanity, and very true... their poison may kill, but to live. It is a good read... |
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