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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time 
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*I just got back from the beach  *Eyes wide open Knowing the dawn will draw near though favoring sleep How is it that I can feel the ocean in my dreams Pounding It is part of me now Such familiarity So unreal Its cadence echoes through my soul Once I was part of the tides Woven 'tween their ebb and flow Content Guarding my heart amidst tiny sunlit flames (But like a piece of driftwood, the current caught me in my songs [Washing me ashore]) Exposed (As the water receded from the strand) Low tide cradled me as the earth clung to my auburn hair I am unraveled Memory... Something is still lingering in the sea (My shattered muse) But to reclaim it, why? One last day am I to dwell within oceanic paradise One more hour One more day 'Til sunset bids me leave Oh, to answer that beckoning of me by my archaic name! (I will go) And the way my feet bleed into sand How my voice sounds 'gainst the roaring and churning of lifeless waves It is home Home like the driftwood lying on the ground (Forgotten and lost) My fingers can feel its story through each smoothened curve Clutching this remnant to my chest I now know how to say farewell to the ocean And I will remember how it is to sleep In eternity With eyes wide open to the world For saints have hands that pilgrims' hands do touch, And palm to palm is holy palmers' kiss.--"Romeo and Juliet" [This message has been edited by IndigoEve (07-19-2003 06:26 PM).] |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
isn't it so calming! I love the ocean so much. I always feel so inspired and exelerated when I'm in it. But for some reason I can't seem to write anything, I tried last time I was on the beach, I think I am just in such a calm state that I can't write, strange really. I'm done blabbering I think. I loved this piece, really beautiful. Brought back pretty memories..  ~Lex [This message has been edited by Lexy (07-19-2003 07:03 PM).] |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
This was truly a great write. Your imagery was amazing in this, great job. The ocean is so awesome, so full of inspiration... Thanks for posting - Cody - |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
What a nice piece. I know it's a cliche, but the imagery was very strong, and the use of Brackets (I belive the proper name is paranthesis or something equally hard to spell) added a sort of undertone to the poem. Nice write! Ellie  I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged! |
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Song_for_Serenity Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97USA |
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. The feeling of it all was very soothing. Anyhoo, have a spiffy day! ~Angela |
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