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Teen Poetry #6

my most serious poem ever

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

0 posted 2003-07-16 11:23 PM

"Broom"

Sweep, sweep
gently sweep
and sweep some more
you big creep

Knock, knock
loudly knock
and then go punch
Mr. Spock

Blam Blam
big ol' blam
blam boomy wowie
christmas ham

Zim Zim
perfectly zim
zim-a-zim-gong
around the rim

-Stinky Twinkie was just kidding about being serious.-

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-07-17 02:38 PM

lol...that was awesome! very funny.
~Lex

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

2 posted 2003-07-17 03:13 PM

ok. my critique...it sucks. lolz im jk. i think its wicked cute

Remember this advice: Hate is only reserved for those we truly love, and dont eat boogers!

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-07-18 01:42 PM

Cute. It made me smile, so I guess I'll say it's good...I don't know, your poems are so different it's kinda hard to say. LoL anyway, thanks for the read.

-Jen

"One's philosophy is not best expressed in words; it's expressed in the choices on makes." -Eleanor Roosevelt

[This message has been edited by BrokenDreams (07-18-2003 01:43 PM).]

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