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Teen Poetry #6

this is different and for the girls

AlostHeart
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 78
Wisconsin, U.S.

0 posted 2003-07-14 12:37 PM

Have you ever had that one dream guy?
The one that you thought you would never find.
The one that haunts you in your dreams.
The one that makes you want to scream?

I found him this last weekend.
I prayed that it would never end.

But he was older,
and oh so cute.
He made me laugh,
and made me blush.
Man how i wish this was more than just a crush.

I would wake up in the morning to see his eyes upon me.
I would smile.
He would smile back.
Then i knew that soon my dreams was where he would return to and all I would have was my memories.

Be happy, and respectful, dont forget about those ones that will always love you no matter how much you screw up!

[This message has been edited by AlostHeart (07-14-2003 12:40 PM).]

sixington
Member

since 2003-07-14

Posts 53
Utah

1 posted 2003-07-14 01:06 PM

I really liked this! It seems to me that rhyming adds to your poetry without limiting you very much. This poem was easy to read and true, too. nicely done!

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-07-14 11:10 PM

Tori you best be calling me like right now! I want details girl! I guess I'll make this short since I know I'll be talking to you soon, but I do have to say that this is one of your better poems, and I'm glad you're posting again. love ya

-Jen

"One's philosophy is not best expressed in words; it's expressed in the choices on makes." -Eleanor Roosevelt

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-07-15 01:03 AM

"Have you ever had that one dream guy?"..sigh...two weeks ago..This was so close to my own experiance it was scary! I'm loving it! I liked that you ryhmed and flowed well at the same time, a lot of poets can't quite do both at the same time but yours works beautifully, and as I said before...sigh, I know how your feeling...!
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

4 posted 2003-07-15 10:35 AM

I loved it I think every girl can think of atleast 1 dream guy that they've had in there lifetime, nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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