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Teen Poetry #6

clean my teeth

collarbone_girl
Junior Member

since 2003-07-14

Posts 45
Wonderland

0 posted 2003-07-14 08:41 AM

-clean my teeth-

my room shines with the
light of a million suns

but it's midnight.

my walls are decorated with
poetry
and my silent screams
echo through
my bedsheets an pillow
cases
soaked in sweat and tears
of alone on dark nights

my blood is black
and my heart
(the root of all evil
according to your mother)

aches for you

my eyes
long to meet yours
in a silent reunion of souls

my fairybone wrists
need to be held in your hands

my hips
have to sway in your arms

with my
blueblackgreenhazeleyes
and my sunwashed tan skin
i'm beautiful

but i'm
nothing
without
you
to
clean
my
teeth

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

1 posted 2003-07-14 09:31 AM

I thought that this poem was wonderful! You did a good job!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

Rise of Truth
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun

2 posted 2003-07-14 01:43 PM

I know something of Truth.
Honestly, i found the style to be attractive (if only because it's departure from the norm), "(the root of all evil
according to your mother)"...hmmm, i find mothers are correct more times than we feel comfortable admitting. There is some good romantic imagery here. I didn't really like it the first time i read it, but i find my self enjoying in the consequetive reads.

I am the prophet
Harbinger of what you fear the most
Your enemy of belligerent honesty
Destroyer of your livelihood, built on falsehood

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2003-07-14 03:01 PM

hmm...I loved it!! tell it like it is. I like the part about your blueblackgreenhazel eyes. that was very unique and well done. I enjoyed.
~Lex

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