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Bruised Junior Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 13Indiana, USA |
"Release" Struggling before me Crawling alone Baring the heat Dripping crimson liquid Oxygen holding you back Slowly fading The wind whispers Your great desires Vengeful thinking Carry you thoughts In your heart Bleeds the screams The intoxicating speech Rises above you all See my mirror Stabbing my destiny Ruining my future to be Running jaded Tainted with lust Your swollen heart Hear my plead Selfish endurance Come with me Help me sacrifice this life Trapped inside these walls Your anger, your greed Just wanna make you go away Taking everything from me Ridding of me This fake ID is taking over These black shields My purple hair My pale face These jagged nails The powered fears My broken heart You're driving me insane To the edge of my line Let me go, just let me go ~ Tenshi |
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snoduck Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 99Selah, WA |
Gruesome, but I do feel ya. I liked it. Keep writing, because I'm going to be looking for more of your work! -Erica- |
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collarbone_girl Junior Member
since 2003-07-14
Posts 45Wonderland |
yeah, man, this was cool. it has funky timing. the short stanzas are really effective! |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
very good, very graphic at parts, but all in all a great piece. thank you for sharing such deep emotions with us. ~Lex  |
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