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Teen Poetry #6

Share A Shoreline

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

0 posted 2003-07-01 11:07 PM

Everything
I wrote last summer
was about you.
Seems the same now.
I wonder if you'll
remember my birthday.
Maybe you'll be
too busy with your moving
and unpacking
and seeing old friends.
You're back
on the east coast.
And though we
share a shoreline
you still seem far away.
Just last week
I got up the nerve
and wrote you a letter
that said:
"IthinkI'minlovewithyou."
All in one sentence
but I bet you knew before that.
Nothing has changed
since I told you.
Though I must admit
you did a
wonderfully considerate
job of telling me
you didn't feel the same.
Once I get some stamps
watch out for a package
filled with everything
that reminds me of you.
And though we
share a shoreline
I don't feel any
closer to you.

[This message has been edited by SimpleDiscourse (07-01-2003 11:12 PM).]

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

1 posted 2003-07-01 11:11 PM

Wow! Exellent work

Obsolete
Junior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 43

2 posted 2003-07-02 01:06 AM

Extremely well done.

Bonfirelight
Member

since 2003-06-19

Posts 85
London, England

3 posted 2003-07-02 09:51 AM

that is really good.
well done

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2003-07-02 12:12 PM

Wonderful! Beautifully expressed poem, it all flowed perfectly. I love the shoreline parts. Awesome job!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

5 posted 2003-07-02 07:43 PM

Thanks. It was sort of just a vent and I just wrote out random things that were going through my head BUT I'm glad you guys enjoyed it.

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