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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"Tell me why?" (09/17/02) © 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved Verse 1 Know it's not the right time or place To discus our relationship, But I really need some answers For it's questionable what you did. Making love to some no good guy And in our house our most sacret place, Darling, you hurting me like that Is just something I can't erase. Build My heart splinter like a Bottle against the floor, And my promises drowned No strenght to reach the shore. So please... Chorus Tell me why, Was it something I didn't do or say. That pushed you in the arms of another. Why'd you have to go and hurt me this way. Tell me why, How could you look me in the eyes and lie. Don't say you love me if you don't mean it. I'm scared it may be our last goodbye. Tell me why... Verse 2 Don't want to anymore then you But if you won't tell me what's wrong, How would I ever understand How would we ever get along. Yes, we're all granted one mistake But we can't work things out like this, Having no honesty or trust Even missing you's will be missed. Build My heart splinter like a Bottle against the floor, And my promises drowned No strenght to reach the shore. So please... Chorus Tell me why, Was it something I didn't do or say. That pushed you in the arms of another. Why'd you have to go and hurt me this way. Tell me why, How could you look me in the eyes and lie. Don't say you love me if you don't mean it. I'm scared it may be our last goodbye. Tell me why... Bridge (3x) Let's make it right Let's start over, Here's my heart Here's my shoulder. But you need to... Chorus ( repeat til end) Tell me why, Was it something I didn't do or say. That pushed you in the arms of another. Why'd you have to go and hurt me this way. Tell me why, How could you look me in the eyes and lie. Don't say you love me if you don't mean it. I'm scared it may be our last goodbye. Tell me why... |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is a rather decent song. I had a few things to mention, but you don't have a critique flag, so I have to hold my tongue... Sorry to cut my response off so short.  Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
No, this is a really good song. I can really imagine it to music. I thought that the message was simple yet you built it up quite nicely and over all I thought it gave a good sense of completion. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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