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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2003-06-29 11:21 PM

I turn away from you
and start to cry red tears
Im bleeding inside
and you can only see it when I cry
these painful tears of blood drop from my eyes.

Slowly they drop
and fall into my open hand
to stain my skin a crimson hue.
My world is spinning
too many things crushing in on me
and all you do, is tell me I made a mistake.

Why can't you even try to understand?!

You can't know how many times I've greived over that mistake,
how stupid of me to let myself love again!
I should have known that death already had a claim,
that sickness and suffering were catching up to him
and the "not knowing" would be my greatest pain.

How can you say it's a small thing?
What little you know.
You have never experienced the greater pains of life
death is Never a small thing,
it is all consuming.

Why can't you even try to understand?!

No really knows me
Im so sick of being misunderstood
so fed up with being invisible
being forgotten five minutes after Im gone,
but I can't make myself be just like everyone else.

Im leaving a trail behind me
violent drops of red
staining everything around me
a crimson hue.
Painful tears of blood drop from my eyes
Im bleeding inside
and you can't even see it when I cry.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

1 posted 2003-06-30 03:03 PM

I hesitate to even reply to this... because I don't know exactly what to say without sounding... shallow.

I am so sorry you're hurting... I wish all of us who feel so alone and invisible in the world could all just find each other so we'd no longer be alone and invisible.

You did a wonderful job on writing this... the emotion you put in to it... the flow... everything makes it into an amazing peice.

-Lioness

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2003-06-30 03:39 PM

Thank you ever so much for your reply.
You can't know how much it is appreciated, Im glad you liked the poem.
Don't worry you didn't come off as shallow.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2003-06-30 04:39 PM

I had the same fears, of not wanting to sound shallow or just some stupid reply...this touches me so much...I have felt like this too....I wish I knew what to say to make you feel better..

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

4 posted 2003-06-30 04:49 PM

I really like this piece, especially the last stanza it flowed together so well, I understand the pain of being misunderstood and in this poem you displayed your emotions so well.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

5 posted 2003-06-30 10:57 PM

Oh, I know so well how this feels! What you have here is beautifully expressed emotion. I loved the way it flowed, how you described the tears of blood, just everything about it got my attention. I'm adding it to my library most definately.

For saints have hands that pilgrims' hands do touch,
And palm to palm is holy palmers' kiss.--"Romeo and Juliet"

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-06-30 11:09 PM

hey, I know how you feel. I really do. If you ever want to talk feel free to email me. Sometimes it's easier to talk to someone over the internet, instead of having to lok them in the eyes. I really love your poem. I hope I helped you in some way, shape or form.

-Jen

I'd rather be hated for who I am than loved for who I am not. -Kurt Cobain

ShadyMakaveli
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 128

7 posted 2003-06-30 11:47 PM

Well i hate to make light of such a serious and powerful peace. But reading your "Constructive Critique" thing, i couldn't help but notice your 100% canadian, eh? I'm sorry that was my lame attempt to be funny.

I want you to know that this poem was like a bomb of emotions that had just exploded and was heading straight for you. Anyone who reads this and can't feel what your saying, quite frankly isn't human. Good write, keep up the good work.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

8 posted 2003-07-01 12:16 PM

Thank you all for your replies,
They are ALL so appreciated!
BrokenDreams: I just might take you up on that offer some day.
Shady:lol, actually Im not canadian, I just like to say "eh". Im so glad that my poem has touched you in some way, hopefully a good one. Thank you for the reply.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

9 posted 2003-07-02 09:00 PM

*BIG HUGS* I don't know quite what to say, but this is incredibly powerful, and I'm glad that I caught it before it went down any further

I hope everything turns around for you...

It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings

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