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The Rejected
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The Rejected |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
The very nerve it takes to do something so horrendous as this, HOW DARE YOU! You've always been in the gutter Yeah you heard me right I didn't stutter. You're always gonna be there even in 10 years. Now you have me crying How many tears? You got me hurting inside How many nights have I cried? Why can't you stop? Why can't you see all this pain you're causing me? I should've know that this was a mistake. But I've always known that YOU WERE FAKE! The demons in me come awake and breathe. As I sit here to mad to seethe. If I didn't know better I'd think this was planned. Yeah, oh yeah, you left me burned and branded. I was brainwashed but now my head is clear and I see your true self AND IT'S SICKENING! Oh no don't try to apologize. Oh no don't try to apologize. You have been selected, to be the one rejected. And don't you forget, all the pain and regret, you planted in my head, as you poisoned my bed. So instead of sleep, I could only weep. Only one can walk away, and since I have nothing to say I'll leave you tied and bound to your pain on the ground... Me against the world, Or me against you? Me against the world, Or me against you? If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. [This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (06-29-2003 04:53 PM).] |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Hell yeah! Man...that could be a freakin' rap song! LoL...I can hear Eminem singin' it now. Awesome job, dude! Seriously...this poem has got such good feeling...and the word usage was perfect! I really like "Yeah, oh yeah, you've left me burned and branded." This whole thing was awesome, seriously. Nice job! I think this is probably one of my favorites of yours. Love's. As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow! Impressive...I absolutely loved this. The flow was perfect and the word choice was powerful. Not sure why, but the two lines that stood out were "You have been selected to be the one rejected" - I'm glad you made the title out of that. Awesome job...two very enthusiastic thumbs up! ~Kay~ The day you were born, you were born free |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Woah! Yea, you show 'em! I can't begin to tell you how much I love this one! Excellent excellent job!  WinterWren |
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