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Trouble Breathing
Member

since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

0 posted 2003-07-20 03:35 PM

Sometimes I wish,
You could look into my eyes,
See half of what I see in just your reflection,
The beauty that you hold inside of you,
Is enough to tell me why I love you,
Just to hear you whisper,
Those three words that mean the most,
The sweet echo of your voice,
Could send a ripple through the waves,
Of the worlds calmest ocean,
The gentleness of your touch,
Could bring life to an un-born child,
You deserve everything you've ever wanted,
And that's what you're going to get,
I'll give it all to you,
With nothing you'll regret,
You gave me a chance,
And now you're mine,
I'm thankful for that everyday,
Everyday for the rest of time

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-07-21 08:58 PM

ha ha, dude. lucky you to capture the one you love. dont let go, dont ever let go. aahhhhhhhhhhhhhh

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2003-07-21 09:18 PM

...sigh...Wonderful emotion..beautiful imagery..Lovely, lovely, lovely. Ok so you can kinda tell what vibe I'm getting on this piece! I enjoyed this imensly
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Silent Evincar
Member

since 2003-07-22

Posts 179
Here There and Places Between

3 posted 2003-07-22 02:23 AM

annnd close curtain. I'm so glad that you got to do what most of us wish would of happened. The words, the thoughts, all great. Live it and Love it...

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

4 posted 2003-07-22 02:34 AM

Yes, this was entirely beautiful, the imagery was amazing and I'm pretty sure everyone is very jealous that you managed to get it in the end, you managed to get what so many of us have deemed to be the un-obtainable...true love...

The only thing I would say is think about revising some of the punctuation, it could make it flow better...at times I got caught in commas...

But it was beautiful none the less...
Lucky, lucky you.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

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