Teen Poetry #6 |
Do you like bubbles? |
xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
Finally ripening with perfection? But you're feeling these complications Another hopeless situation And the past can't be shaken From your mind But their mistaken I see you awaking And pulling pieces together Shattered remnence of a Crumbled dream And a broken heart It's coming together These people are not the Way you remembered them Empty fascades filled with illusions And they'll use you They will abuse you For what you are But what will you do? [This message has been edited by xEmperorEmber (06-27-2003 07:39 PM).] |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
Dear Person in charge My other poem, Removed? Relocated... or did it just fail to upload... Paul |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paul, I tried to email you, it bounced back to me....I pulled it, due to sexual content and the use of the word whore. It is under review, and when I have an answer for you, where shall I email it to? send it to my email if you'd like it kept private. |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
[email protected] should work, if not you can ermmm eh i dont know.. just delete it and we'll never speak of it again |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
sorry paully maybe one day you'll manage to conform to standards. Im working on it. this one is nice as well |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
email sent, and this poem? Very cool |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
The first line really sparked my interest on this one...Goob job. ~Jess "If I could give you one gift it would be my eyes...So you could see how it feels to be me looking at you." -Unknown |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
-Sighs- Love this I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
Loved this... ~J.Lynn "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This was the first thing I've read of yours, and I have to say that I loved it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Also, interesting title selection. It's an eye-catcher. -Jen |
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xEmperorEmber Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 136tx |
Thank you, im glad you all enjoyed it... there are more if your interested... because i post different things on the website at different times... you understand. paul |
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Jaime
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MemberPosts 250 |
The big question. It's not my favourite, but I like your message and the words in which you used to express it. And I think that it's "ripening". Love, yours. the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots |
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