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Moonlit Sonata |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time 
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This is my first try at palindrome poetry (aka Mirrored poetry). Tell me what you think. break soundlessly stars painted through jaded sighs moon wandering forever songs precious to me, bound gracefully fated lovers here found divinity stirring kisses cherished delicately unspoken attraction - Sonata - attraction unspoken delicately cherished kisses stirring divinity found here lovers fated gracefully bound me to precious songs forever wandering moon sighs jaded through painted stars soundlessly break [This message has been edited by IndigoEve (06-17-2003 02:46 PM).] |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
I must say I was very impressed with this. It's not a structure I'm particularly familiar with, and it looks extremely hard. It seems to me that it would be easy to concentrate merely on getting your words to work in a gramatical sense, when reflected, rather than making it sound beautiful, and have meaning. You've avoided this, both halves are meaningful and beautiful. I had Beethoven ringing in my ears as I read, was it based on his piece or did you just like the title? |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Woah.... that looks incredibly hard... makes me almost wanna try it... Huh.... I'm very very impressed. I'd love to see another one if you ever feel up to it  |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
Beautifully written...I could NEVER do something like that! LOL. I thought it was a great poem! Thanks for sharing! ~J.Lynn  "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
Thanks everyone! No, I didn't base it off of Beethoven, I just happened to like the way it sounded.  And sure, I'd be glad to write another and post it...I'm always up for the challenge!  |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
*Heels the stop sign* Thank God that was there otherwise my "WOWness" would go on forever and that would just be a waste of valuable space. I have no choice but to carefully and quietly to add this incredible piece of art to my library. For me to pick out one line, would be too hard...So I shall pick the whole thing to say that it was a favorite. I don't think I've ever read any of your work, but I know I will start now. *Thumbs up* Peace. Love. Happiness. ~*~Kirah~*~ "Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I wish I could write reflected, and while i've never tried, I already know how frustrated I would get, that was a great poem, can't wait til the next one ~*~Karen~*~ |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I thought this was written very well for a first try at this format. It's difficult to make sense of everything forwards AND backwards. The only critique I have for you is practice. You want to make this as smooth as possible so that the reader does not notice the fowards-backwards lines. I think the reader might enjoy it more if you did not tell them what format you were using. We like to feel smart in noticing formats.  Considering that I'm learning the entire Moonlight Sonata (Op.27 No.2) for piano, it's interesting to see what people write for it. While I was reading this, I could hear the Moonlight Sonata playing in the background. Very cool. Keep up the good work! -Leah  |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Just ignore this. I forgot to add you to my library... and ended up doing it backwards.  [This message has been edited by blueyedlioness (06-20-2003 09:53 PM).] |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Woah. *rushes off to try it* |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Wow, for your first time at doing this, it was great. Very descriptive. Awesome. If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Ummm..speachless!!! .:Bows to the master:. ~live and Laugh~ Don't look to me for perfection, for I will surely let you down. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i liked this, but it seamed a little forced, but good style... |
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