Teen Poetry #6 |
Crazy Old Painter |
Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"Crazy Old Painter" (17/06/03) Verse Hanging her picture on the wall he says: "Jane, at least I got to paint you On a brass bed with bright orange poppies just like I always wanted to. We had some good times in my old rowbode in the pond 'side the old folks home And private feasts with sandwitches and tea on a bench in the park alone..." Chorus I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano, Singing "do you love me lady Jane, lady Jane." Or I'm talking about you to Ezra on the phone "Jane, she's the reason that this old man is filled with rain." I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano... Verse "Should have seen your face when your kids they called, you lit up the intire room. Remember when I was tickeling your feet, well I still have that peacock plume" Sitting down at the piano and says: "Wrote you a little something hun, Know it's not much but it's all I can do, I'm no Joshua Kadison..." Chorus I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano Singing "do you love me lady Jane, lady Jane" Or I'm talking about you to Ezra on the phone "Jane, she's the reason that this old man is filled with rain." I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano... Bridge Your daughter Marie came by yesterday She looks just like you, got your same smile too She told me " you were good to mom old man So you'll always be part of our fam'ly" What could I do, then say "Thank you, Marie"... Chorus I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano Singing "do you love me lady Jane, lady Jane" Or I'm talking about you to Ezra on the phone "Jane, she's the reason that this old man is filled with rain." I'm just a crazy old painter playing piano... |
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kadafi09 Member
since 2003-06-17
Posts 143California, United States |
catchy rythym, we gotta get some music to accompany it. I loved the alliteration throughout the poem. thankyou for posting it |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
There is no doubt that you posess talents in the songwriting category. I am extremely impressed with the way you write lyrics and how you convey your ideas through them. I wouldn't mind listening to your songs either. I'm putting this one in my library. I've always enjoyed reading your work and I look forward to reading more. -Leah |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
*stares* Ohmigosh. Okay, that's the best thing I've read in here in quite awhile. And you are now getting added to my library. It's perfect... it's amazing... I'm... reading it again...! -Lioness |
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