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lucky624
New Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 2

0 posted 2003-06-16 11:05 PM

Without You

Without you,
There wouldn’t be as many stars in the sky
Not as many stars in my eyes
There is perpetual sunshine
Not a cloud goes by
A glow surrounds me

You pulled me out of my hole
Without you,
I would suffocate
You are the air that I breath,
The thoughts of my mind
You help me live my life
And enjoy what I do

Many others envy me
They would give anything to be in my position
But you are mine
I’m never letting go

Nothing can change the way I think about you
From the first day
From the first hour
From the first minute
From the first second,
I knew you were the one
The one I’ve been looking for
For my whole life

This whole time you were one day ahead of me,
Yet so far behind
Why didn’t I realize you were real before?
With so much in common,
We make a great pair

My care for you grows stronger every day
Eventually it will turn into love
If it isn’t there already
It will always be prevalent
Even if we aren’t
The first true love I have ever felt

Sweetness consumes me
But without you,
My life would be bitter.

This is a poem that I am very proud of... it symbolizes many different things but it is all summed up in one poem. Yes, it is about someone that I deeply care about, but it is also about Jesus Christ and how I couldn't live without him... please critique me on this... I would appreciate it.

Ms. Blondie

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

1 posted 2003-06-17 02:46 AM

This is a very beautiful poem...one that you SHOULD be proud of! Very nice job! Awesome!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

LegalSecret69
Member

since 2003-06-04

Posts 69
Virginia

2 posted 2003-06-17 01:00 PM

hey! This was really good... and I agree, you should be proud of it. good job..i'll be looking for more! *Jessica*

topsyturveychick
Member

since 2003-01-19

Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus

3 posted 2003-06-17 09:39 PM

Hey, great poem. I to have poems about guys and also about God. It's sometimes hard to define who ur writting the poem for. It's really awesome and u should b heaps proud of it. CONGRATS!!!!

I asked God how much he loved me...
He said this much...
And streched out his arms and Died.

**Sunshine**

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